the first of many posts like this i think

i think i'm going to post some poems and talk about where they come from and dissect the lines, so that it can give a little depth to the poem.

this poem began as an erotic piece, but as writing it i just left my idea n went with the flow making it a poem about the innocence of the relationship.

two bodies entwined hidden from the moonlit sky
cliche in simplicity and passion
everything else was forgotten
both time
and place
and pain (< this is where the erotic stopped)
they clung
two lost children
in the darkest cave (< this comes from the fact that outside my window there are bushes that have little dark cave-looking parts to them)
the mirror
concave (< i actually had to check and make sure this was right kind of mirror for the following>
reflecting
imaginary and
upside down
they are too far from the focal lines
to be focused on anything
but themselves (< i failed my physics class this year... it sucks)

but even in the darkest cave
other senses see sights
unknowingly
other senses see sights (< repeating lines alliteration help with)
never seen before
these imaginary
upside down
images
reflect in ways
you could never see
only know
with sights seen
by other senses (< separated third repetition to put really get the point in your)

come with me
to the depths of the darkest cave
you wont need your eyes anymore
we'll never see what we're looking for
these concave mirrors
reflect upside down
and imaginary images
only to be seen by other senses (4th appearance in this stanza i try to tie all the imagery together)

come with me
to the depths of the darkest cave
cling to me
and i will keep you safe
from all your nightmares
even yourself (< this stanza talks the reader have a hero complex and really want to save people. i don't know why)